The place sounds mysterious,the people around me look scary I don’t know where I’m going,I’m just walking down a path that don’t stop.All you could hear was the sound of wind blowing on the back of my head the blazing sun was shinning as bright as a lightbulb in a dark room.
March 7, 2014 at 11:11 am
This is a very evocative piece – nice work, Gabriel. Where you have placed commas, you will want to replace these with full stops and capital letters as these are actually new sentences.
Also, shining is spelt with one n.
I love the use of simile and the use of the first person.
Mr Waugh